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Post by marcovalintine on Sept 21, 2013 16:17:19 GMT -5
Feedback on my first rp in EAW please
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lenton
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Post by lenton on Sept 21, 2013 16:52:56 GMT -5
My head hurt reading it. So much bad sentence structure (yes, I'm very picky when it comes to grammar) haha. I took the wording and dialogue as being the way he spoke, but the run on sentences gave me a headache. Try to work on that next time haha. Other than that, it was a good rplay.
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Vincent Hale
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Post by Vincent Hale on Sept 21, 2013 17:00:55 GMT -5
I thought it was a well-constructed roleplay. I liked the 'trash talk' element, where you explained what the character was like, as well as the outside of ring portion where you expanded on the idea of what he does in his spare time. 8/10
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Post by marcovalintine on Sept 21, 2013 20:57:53 GMT -5
Thanks for the feedback people, with my grammar i'm not too good with it tbh cause of a learning difficulty i have, im working on it but sometimes i have a harder time of it than others
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lenton
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Post by lenton on Sept 21, 2013 21:24:19 GMT -5
Ah, all right fella. Sorry if it sounded harsh lol. Just am picky with grammar and things like that (always have been), so it wasn't anything personal. As I said, aside from that it was a good rplay. Just keep working on it and you'll improve in that aspect.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 22, 2013 19:36:34 GMT -5
Wacky, sexy, crazy. Loved it! Liking this character a lot.
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Post by marcovalintine on Sept 23, 2013 5:41:15 GMT -5
Thanks mate, and no worries lenton i just wanted to explain i have problems with that sometimes
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